Rack Up Your Post With Random Stuff Part 3

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i cant start it
i just cant
i'm crap at starting it
butonce i have im ok

now im stuck on starting it
I know!!!That's how it is with me.Once I get the beginning,I can work with it without a problem!
 
i have to describe a place
so i have this picture inb my mind
it's an eerie moor
and i know what i want to do
i just cant start it
 


eerie moors aren't exactly around here,sorry!lol
 
uurrgghhh heres my start:rolleyes:

The fog rolled in from every direction. Everywhere he looked the eerie white mist was creeping up on him. He spun around in circles watching it enclose him. He walked backwards watching the fog follow him like a sheep. He started to run as if to get away from the fog but it pursued him, infact now it seemed to have overtaken him, it was above him, below him to the left and right everywhere he looked the fog hung over him.
 


wow :)

why is this person afraid of the fog?


well im glad you got that impression
ok well hes on a spooky moor and night and then to add to it fog rolls in
wouldnt you be scared of the fog??


d you think it's ok for a Y8/Grade 7 ???
 
:rolleyes:
your 2 years above me
and your a talented guy
i highly doubt it
 
Hello Charmaine I am Dr.Roberts. It says here on your chart that last night you went into cardiac arrest becasue your side split open. How are you felling this lovely afternoon?
 
lol

george if your still on when i finish i'll pm you the fi nished thing
 
uurrgghhh heres my start:rolleyes:

The fog rolled in from every direction. Everywhere he looked the eerie white mist was creeping up on him. He spun around in circles watching it enclose him. He walked backwards watching the fog follow him like a sheep. He started to run as if to get away from the fog but it pursued him, infact now it seemed to have overtaken him, it was above him, below him to the left and right everywhere he looked the fog hung over him.

That's really great, it remids me of this old Sherlock Holmes movie...

Some constructive critisicm though you used He a little to much... but otheriwse VERY discritptive....

Really gooood!
 
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